You are absolutely right. There are quite a number of related topics that need to be addressed ... racial disparity probably being the most significant factor underlying the (rising) maternal death rate in the US. Not to mention the fact that compared globally, the US is ranked 41st out of 171 countries, with even some developing countries having a much lower maternal death rate. That's appalling. And I'd like to tackle these issues in subsequent articles -- the reason I couldn't hit on all of them in this piece has to do with space.
Regarding writing style, most newspapers publish writing that is at a 5th to 7th grade level. But critiquing writing style isn't at all helpful in this space. (You're welcome to sign up, become a member of EmpowHer, and send me a private message if you'd like to discuss it further.) What's way more important and helpful to our EmpowHer audience is discussing health issues that are impacting women and their families.
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You are absolutely right. There are quite a number of related topics that need to be addressed ... racial disparity probably being the most significant factor underlying the (rising) maternal death rate in the US. Not to mention the fact that compared globally, the US is ranked 41st out of 171 countries, with even some developing countries having a much lower maternal death rate. That's appalling. And I'd like to tackle these issues in subsequent articles -- the reason I couldn't hit on all of them in this piece has to do with space.
Regarding writing style, most newspapers publish writing that is at a 5th to 7th grade level. But critiquing writing style isn't at all helpful in this space. (You're welcome to sign up, become a member of EmpowHer, and send me a private message if you'd like to discuss it further.) What's way more important and helpful to our EmpowHer audience is discussing health issues that are impacting women and their families.
May 29, 2009 - 10:42amThis Comment
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